Jack and Jill and the Fool on the Hill (part 2)

So it turns out that I wasn’t completely clear on the assignment. We were not expected to make only one narrative out of the given lines from “Jack & Jill” and “Fool on the Hill”. Rather, we were meant to do six narratives with accompanying thumbnails, then one will be selected for a final to be presented – printed and matted.

The images will be contained in 6 4.5″ x 4.5″ squares on a black 15″ x 20″ board with 1.25″ horizontal gutters, a 1.5″ vertical gutter and 2.25″ vertical margins and 2″ horizontal margins.

Images will be made using provided dingbats file images.

Here are the six rewrites:

Jack fell down
and broke his crown
they can see he’s just a fool
but nobody wants to know him
day after day, alone on the hill
and he never gives an answer

Jack & Jill
went up the hill
but the fool on the hill
they can see he’s just a fool
but nobody wants to know him
and he never gives an answer

To fetch a pail of water
the man with the foolish grin is keeping perfectly still
and broke his crown
day after day, alone on the hill
they can see that he’s just a fool
and he never gives an answer (((or: but nobody wants to know him)))

Jack & Jill
went up the hill
day after day, alone on the hill
the man with the foolish grin is keeping perfectly still
and he never gives an answer
they can see his just a fool

Day after day, alone on the hill
they can see that he’s just fool
but nobody wants to know him
Jack & Jill
went up the hill
and broke his crown

Jack fell down
they can see that he’s just a fool
day after day, alone on the hill
the man with the foolish grin is keeping perfectly still
and he never gives an answer
but nobody wants to know him
(((alternatively swap the last two lines)))

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